tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post6739126205995558650..comments2024-03-26T11:32:56.196-07:00Comments on Revising & Editing: To Show or Tell by Helene Young!Nas http://www.blogger.com/profile/08341843048288374472noreply@blogger.comBlogger34125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-51533579295510775012013-08-05T01:43:09.095-07:002013-08-05T01:43:09.095-07:00Hi Helene,
Thanks for sharing this. Very informat...Hi Helene,<br /><br />Thanks for sharing this. Very informative.<br /><br />Congratulations on the release of Half Moon Bay!<br /><br />Kelly Steelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030019966183220952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-91227173106775611912013-08-03T19:40:24.690-07:002013-08-03T19:40:24.690-07:00Hi Maria, that's something that jars with me a...Hi Maria, that's something that jars with me as well. Less is definitely better as the reader's imagination will fill in the gaps which then makes it even more personal for them. It's all about creating empathy with our characters and every reader is different. Thanks for joining in the discussion :-)Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-36238397889831832252013-08-03T19:38:44.745-07:002013-08-03T19:38:44.745-07:00Thanks, Cherie, glad you enjoyed them! Thanks for ...Thanks, Cherie, glad you enjoyed them! Thanks for dropping by :)Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-36242838878633430412013-08-03T19:37:58.020-07:002013-08-03T19:37:58.020-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-11296185163643142922013-08-03T00:20:18.545-07:002013-08-03T00:20:18.545-07:00Hi Helene,
I remember reading a work by a best se...Hi Helene,<br /><br />I remember reading a work by a best selling author years ago and feeliing extremely irritated at practically being told what to think. She told us what the main character was doing and why they were doing it. Really, less is more when you think about it.<br /><br />Thank you Nas for hosting Helene.Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09977676093756206414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-46592737659994790482013-08-02T18:30:13.111-07:002013-08-02T18:30:13.111-07:00Wonderful tips and examples of show vs tell!Wonderful tips and examples of show vs tell!Cherie Reichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16663147386014122939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-91284893231986468172013-08-01T16:20:41.302-07:002013-08-01T16:20:41.302-07:00Thanks, Stina, hopefully it will be helpful - it&#...Thanks, Stina, hopefully it will be helpful - it's easy to forget some of the basics when we're head down, fingers to the keys! Thanks for visiting :-)Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-83919401058712032132013-08-01T16:18:46.270-07:002013-08-01T16:18:46.270-07:00My pleasure, Susanne, I think it's the aspect ...My pleasure, Susanne, I think it's the aspect I have to work hardest at and I spend more time mulling it over than any other area of writing. Thanks for visiting!!Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-49897449533299934342013-08-01T16:16:47.436-07:002013-08-01T16:16:47.436-07:00Thanks, Nutschell :) The cover really does convey ...Thanks, Nutschell :) The cover really does convey so much of the book - very happy with it. Hope the tips help and thanks for stopping by!Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-13418292316962519232013-08-01T16:14:46.850-07:002013-08-01T16:14:46.850-07:00Thanks, Stephanie, I was delighted when I saw the ...Thanks, Stephanie, I was delighted when I saw the finished cover - looking forward to the one for next year's book now :-) Sounds like you're already aware of what you need to do. All the very best with your writing!Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-89705407128299572022013-08-01T16:13:25.060-07:002013-08-01T16:13:25.060-07:00Thanks, Deniz, I'm very lucky to have a portab...Thanks, Deniz, I'm very lucky to have a portable home that has amazing views!! Glad you enjoyed the post.Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-88821831826494659992013-08-01T16:06:26.166-07:002013-08-01T16:06:26.166-07:00Thanks, Suze, Zeus is an awesome dog!!!Thanks, Suze, Zeus is an awesome dog!!!Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-41741671140834493842013-08-01T16:05:51.599-07:002013-08-01T16:05:51.599-07:00That's great advice, Sandra. I'll have to ...That's great advice, Sandra. I'll have to check out Jill's book. I haven't heard of it before! Thanks for dropping by:)Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-59820537025765327022013-08-01T16:04:36.783-07:002013-08-01T16:04:36.783-07:00Thanks, Manzanita, glad you enjoyed them. I always...Thanks, Manzanita, glad you enjoyed them. I always think examples are easier to understand than a straight explanation.Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-50669011927918522252013-08-01T15:18:10.962-07:002013-08-01T15:18:10.962-07:00I love this post because you show HOW to show with...I love this post because you show HOW to show with the great examples. Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-67435608741669022232013-08-01T12:33:00.824-07:002013-08-01T12:33:00.824-07:00great post! Love all the tips. And that book cover...great post! Love all the tips. And that book cover is just so intriguing!<br />Nutschell<br />www.thewritingnut.comnutschellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10967710710805174781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-29277845400620445462013-08-01T12:18:05.127-07:002013-08-01T12:18:05.127-07:00The cover of Half Moon Bay is beautiful!
I loved ...The cover of Half Moon Bay is beautiful!<br /><br />I loved this post because the examples were so clear and easy to follow. This is something that I am still working on in my writing- but I have been working hard to show not tell and going back and editing I pick up areas that need to be shown instead. :) <br /><br />Helene- your life sounds dreamy. :) Best of luck!Stephanie@Fairday's Bloghttp://thesecretdmsfilesoffairdaymorrow.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-88131406371927699232013-08-01T11:47:25.280-07:002013-08-01T11:47:25.280-07:00Great examples, Helene.
And, oh! I'm jealous o...Great examples, Helene.<br />And, oh! I'm jealous of where you live :-)Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-15490468737243826222013-08-01T07:23:55.973-07:002013-08-01T07:23:55.973-07:00Zeus is an awesome name for a dog. Congratulations...Zeus is an awesome name for a dog. Congratulations on Half Moon Bay!Suzehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908805179119217608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-39166208073449335192013-08-01T06:26:05.316-07:002013-08-01T06:26:05.316-07:00That's good. I was imagining them snorkelling ...That's good. I was imagining them snorkelling in the hope of finding seaweed in bloom.Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-52395703193163132822013-08-01T06:12:22.720-07:002013-08-01T06:12:22.720-07:00I recently read a helpful booklet called 'Rive...I recently read a helpful booklet called 'Rivet Your Reader with Deep Point of View' by Jill Elizabeth Nelson. One of the most helpful tips I learnt was to avoid using words that create narrative distance, e.g. thought, felt, knew, wondered, realised, speculated, decided, wished. Instead, just show what's happening!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09441114634550462661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-44381847369495193972013-08-01T05:37:25.781-07:002013-08-01T05:37:25.781-07:00The examples are interesting and illuminate the me...The examples are interesting and illuminate the merits of show vs. tell. Manzanitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06467261212623663365noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-25718697927365568352013-08-01T04:11:25.515-07:002013-08-01T04:11:25.515-07:00Good point, Annalisa :) Good point, Annalisa :) Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-33573874865359660182013-08-01T00:36:50.102-07:002013-08-01T00:36:50.102-07:00Great advice. I think everyone falls into it occas...Great advice. I think everyone falls into it occasionally - catching it before you submit it is the key :-)Annalisa Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14943610814274794998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8015025502147924207.post-89940384451806313362013-07-31T23:35:38.797-07:002013-07-31T23:35:38.797-07:00And thanks for stopping by, Susanne :-) I try and ...And thanks for stopping by, Susanne :-) I try and do it more while I'm writing the first draft but inevitably it needs more during the editing process...Helene Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03642970292885499132noreply@blogger.com